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Help with short story please guys!!

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becki161 | 09:06 Thu 02nd Jun 2011 | ChatterBank
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Im currently trying to right a novel for a writing class and i just need some help in the direction! Rough outline to the story -

Couple been together for a long time - childhood sweethearts in fact- never been with anyone else - been trying for a baby for 18 months - found out they can't have children recently - still in love but going through a really tough time - not getting along lately - not sure where to go from here.

Girl in couple starts to develop feelings for younger guy friend - not sure if its because of the strain on current relationship or if she is really falling for him - nothing happens but feels get stronger - he is going to America travelling he wants her to go with him.

Which end to the story would you rather read? - Does she realise she cant live without her boyfriend and they get engaged or do and her boyfriend split up and goes to America?

All will be more intense and dramatised etc! I just don't know which way to go! What ending to the book would you guys rather read?
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Firstly well done in writing a novel, it's not an easy task as I am a writer of children's books, after years only now ready for representation! (anyway)

I think your story is one that will hit home with a lot of people, mostly women as this is probably your target audience. I think the days of a happy conventional ending are over. Personally I think she should...
09:54 Thu 02nd Jun 2011
the boyfriend runs off to america with the younger guy.
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What has happened to your Lu Becki?
that shes chooses another option - a twist in the story right at the end.....she decides to do something else - as she cannot choose between the two chaps...
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Its romcom 1st car chases and explosions are next time! Haha good one Mick! I changed my email address and it wouldnt let me keep the Lu so i went for the Becki instead! Weird you remembered that! Pleuni thats a good shout!
ask the " boyfriend who is going to america to donate some sperm. stay with old boyfriend . she gets pregnant, next book what happened next !!!!!!!!
That she runs off with younger guy.... Bf can't live without her and goes America looking for her.
They split up and have hot sex with random people.
Oh, now I see it's romcom. Well of course they get engaged, then married and then have hot sex with random people.
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she goes to america and both boys follow her there is a dramatic car chase as they both race to declare their love, she has to choose but falls off a cliff. but is saved by the evil dr nobottom who kidnap's her and harvests her eggs to make clones who are then sent out to take over the world
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you're asking ABers? You should ask the characters. If you've drawn them as real people, they'll be acting according to their own personalities, whatever that may be. It won't necessarily be the popular ending, because life's like that.
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sheesh, is this place being overrun by fake Hargreaves characters?
jno - blame triggs for that he started it.
you cant blame triggs, you have to respect his authoritah!!!!!
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she has a fling with the younger lad, he goes off to america, but she falls preggers, assumes it's the younger lads, tells him, he goes quiet but decides to come home and build a grown up life so he can support the baby, she tells her fella about the fling before she starts to show, her jibs her off.. but the baby turns out to be the boyfriend's all along! ooooh dramatic or what!?!

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