I have seen a few different versions of the poem Do Not Stand At My Grave and Weep and I think I like this one the best http://www.ask.com/wi..._at_my_grave_and_weep but I'm just wondering why in the middle does it break from the "I am" theme to say "Of Circling..." and then return to it. I think it would be better to have just kept it the same the whole way through, or at least not have broken the train of thought of it.
"I am in the graceful rush of beautiful birds in circling flight", is much more poignant, and 'flight' rhymes with 'night', whereas 'rush' rhymes with .... errm ... mush?