Poor Sentence (Again)?

[ilovemarkb]

With regards to patient B the plan of care was to act upon her low body temperature and set about returning it to normal as per NICE guidelines.

does this make sense? been pondering over it for 30 minutes now?

[factor-fiction]

I'd just add a comma after patient B.

[Tilly2]

.......and a 'to' before set.

[factor-fiction]

" to act upon her low body temperature and set about returning it to normal" could be simplified since by returning her body temperature to normal you are acting upon it. However , it's only a minor point as the grammar seems okay

[aelmpvw]

stop worrying, it will make sense to a sensible person

[factor-fiction]

You know better than I do Tilly, but I probably would have omitted the 'to' too as 'to' is used so often already.

[Tilly2]

'to act upon' and 'to set about'. It just makes it neater.

[factor-fiction]

It is understandable but if it's an academic assignment though, aelmpvw, some students may have been told to improve their grammar in these assignments, so it's understandable if ilovemarkb wants some advice.

[Tilly2]

I agree with aelmpvw. I makes sense as it is.

[factor-fiction]

I must make that slight error quite often then as I would say "to act upon her low body temperature and set about ..." - I'd omit the TO on the basis that it was 'given'.
Is that just a style issue, Tilly, or is it bad grammar to omit the second 'to'?

[Psybbo]

Arguementative this morning?

[dotty.]

it doesn't seem like a sentence it seems more like a phrase, as it starts as an additional piece from a full sentence

[factor-fiction]

Me sibton? More a discussion than an argument. I know Tilly knows her stuff and just wondered whether my usual style of writing was not grammatically correct.

[factor-fiction]

Or should that be "and I just wondered...?

[aelmpvw]

ilovemarkb asked if it made sense, not if it was grammatically perfect

[dotty.]

it doesn't make sense to me as the context is missing

[THECORBYLOON]

"The plan is to sing, to dance and to have a good time." is fine for emphasis or dramatic effect but there is no need to have more than the single "to" if it is a simple statement of fact.

[aelmpvw]

i give up

[ilovemarkb]

Thanks guys!! So Dotty how would you construct this sentence?

[Tilly2]

This could go on to infinity, factor.

[slaney]

The plan of care for patient B was to treat her low body temperature, and return it to normal as per NICE guidelines.
Just a suggestion...