Opinions on my song lyrics?

[jeffgreggs]

Let me know what you think about my song lyrics! Thanks :D


MORNING LIGHT

The morning light hits my face
Lying beside me is an empty space
You should, you should be there

Waking up, in a daze,
How I miss your loving gaze,
Staring, deep in your eyes

Loneliness drives me insane,
Drinking just to ease the pain,
Your love, your love is gone

CHORUS
Another day, another night
In my dreams our love shines bright
Oh our love ends with morning light

I walk the streets, cold and alone
Cold wind chills me to the bone
You used, to walk with me

I see you now with other men
Meal for one for me again
I can’t, I can’t move on

I sit and watch you from afar,
I sleep with my door ajar
I hope, that you’ll walk in

CHORUS
Another day, another night
In my dreams our love shines bright
Oh our love ends with morning light

Staring out the window pane
Hope to see your face again
I know, you won’t walk by

Love how you gave, never to take
How you look when you wake
You were, perfect for me

How long before you will return
My love for you constantly burns
I love, i love you still

CHORUS
Another day, another night
In my dreams our love shines bright
Oh our love ends with morning light

I close my eyes, drift off to sleep
In my dreams, I do not weep
You were, still here with me

When the sunlight hits my eyes
Happiness is gone, and dies
Pain starts, with morning light

CHORUS
Another day, another night
In my dreams our love shines bright
Oh our love ends with morning light

[ELVIS68]

In what genre is it?

[baza]

sad. moving.

[baza]

Have you written the music to accompany it?

[gazzawazza]

I think they're better than the lyrics in a lot of songs you hear, I would love to hear it especially if it was one of those sort of happy-sounding songs with really bittersweet lyrics.

[lauratwentyeight]

thats really good alot of thought and emotion in it ;)

[percypineapple]

Hi,
Good stuff, but perhaps too many words, would equate to a longish song, more like a country and western story type. Have you put it to music? I write songs, but i csannot sing to save my life, so i have to play them on the keyboard, then try to fit them into the guitar. much easier if you can sing.
Also, beware of writing poetry as a song, too much rhyme can make a song sound a bit childish.
but good stuff, better than most of the tight T shirt and jeans brigade who think they are paul mccartney.
Percy.

[erin-x]

You and Laura should get together! Lol!