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i have to write a personal statement for my GCSE options, but i have no idea how to do it, what to write, how to start it off, help anyone? it would be much appriciated
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In an attempt to maintain and develop my scientific knowledge, I have made the three science subjects the focus of my sixth year. My Advanced Highers, chemistry and biology, particularly interest me, as not only do I enjoy the content of the curriculum - it gives me an opportunity to explore the fields I enjoy most. This final year also serves as a means by which to bridge the gap between school and university - which although daunting is an exciting prospect.
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As well as these related activities, I also worked for a five month period as a waitress in a Golf Club. I believe this experience widened not only my range of practical skills, but also my ability to communicate with and relate to people from all walks of life. I may not otherwise have experienced this.
In addition to the above, I have a number of achievements, which although not directly related to any particular course, demonstrate my enthusiastic and committed nature. I am a member of my school volleyball team which holds a number of titles including the 'Scottish National Championship Winners 2001' (I was voted the 'Most Valuable Player' in the Junior National League 2000). I am also currently undertaking a First Aid course, which will result in my becoming a qualified First Aider.
In 3rd, 4th and 5th year I was voted class Form Captain and in 5th year was appointed one of only 10 prefects. I consider my greatest achievement to be my election as School Captain, which as well as being a great honour carries with it a considerable amount of responsibility. My duties involve liaising between staff and peers, organising various school events, eg open evenings, 6th year prom and occasional public speaking. These tasks require maturity, tolerance and tactfulness, attributes which I believe are essential for a career in veterinary medicine.
In an attempt to maintain and develop my scientific knowledge, I have made the three science subjects the focus of my sixth year. My Advanced Highers, chemistry and biology, particularly interest me, as not only do I enjoy the content of the curriculum - it gives me an opportunity to explore the fields I enjoy most. This final year also serves as a means by which to bridge the gap between school and university - which although daunting is an exciting prospect.
Additional information
As well as these related activities, I also worked for a five month period as a waitress in a Golf Club. I believe this experience widened not only my range of practical skills, but also my ability to communicate with and relate to people from all walks of life. I may not otherwise have experienced this.
In addition to the above, I have a number of achievements, which although not directly related to any particular course, demonstrate my enthusiastic and committed nature. I am a member of my school volleyball team which holds a number of titles including the 'Scottish National Championship Winners 2001' (I was voted the 'Most Valuable Player' in the Junior National League 2000). I am also currently undertaking a First Aid course, which will result in my becoming a qualified First Aider.
In 3rd, 4th and 5th year I was voted class Form Captain and in 5th year was appointed one of only 10 prefects. I consider my greatest achievement to be my election as School Captain, which as well as being a great honour carries with it a considerable amount of responsibility. My duties involve liaising between staff and peers, organising various school events, eg open evenings, 6th year prom and occasional public speaking. These tasks require maturity, tolerance and tactfulness, attributes which I believe are essential for a career in veterinary medicine.
Statement Critique
Para 1 - Sets out background and stresses long-term interest in veterinary medicine.
Para 2 - Lists experience - but does not explain type of work done - in this section the types of experience could perhaps have been summarised as, for example, 'in veterinary surgeries' - so leaving space for details of work, for instance 'reception duties' or 'assisting with monitoring animals after surgery' or 'responsible for feeding animals' - as appropriate. (Is 'experience' listed in chronological order? - there are dates for some, why not for all?).
Para 3 - Summarises relevant skills (which are also transferable) learned during this experience.
Para 4 - Value of final year at school, both academic and as a 'bridge'. Note - sentence 2 phrase ' not only do I�� ' suggests there should also be a 'but I also��..', which is not there. Stresses idea of looking forward to going to university but realises it will not be easy.
Para 5 - Information which is not directly vocational. With additional space, is able to give detail which may not be possible on paper version of form - eg details of achievements of volleyball team. Ends by linking non-vocational activities to proposed career, so making them very relevant.
Para 1 - Sets out background and stresses long-term interest in veterinary medicine.
Para 2 - Lists experience - but does not explain type of work done - in this section the types of experience could perhaps have been summarised as, for example, 'in veterinary surgeries' - so leaving space for details of work, for instance 'reception duties' or 'assisting with monitoring animals after surgery' or 'responsible for feeding animals' - as appropriate. (Is 'experience' listed in chronological order? - there are dates for some, why not for all?).
Para 3 - Summarises relevant skills (which are also transferable) learned during this experience.
Para 4 - Value of final year at school, both academic and as a 'bridge'. Note - sentence 2 phrase ' not only do I�� ' suggests there should also be a 'but I also��..', which is not there. Stresses idea of looking forward to going to university but realises it will not be easy.
Para 5 - Information which is not directly vocational. With additional space, is able to give detail which may not be possible on paper version of form - eg details of achievements of volleyball team. Ends by linking non-vocational activities to proposed career, so making them very relevant.