metaphorically rephrase please??

[5487]

'how cruel that our sun has setted when it had only began to rise.'

It isnt very fitting for what i wanted to apply it to.

PLEASE help??:)

[5487]

?

[jno]

um... what do you want to apply it to?

[ludwig]

How about, 'We had joy we had fun, we had Forest on the run, but the joy didn't last , cos the b&rstards ran too fast' ?

[teddybon]

only the good die young...

[TrishK7]

Bad grammar is never fitting, anytime, anywhere.

[hippyhoppy]

surely the sun 'sets' not setted!...?

[TrishK7]

And I was thinking of "began" . That should be "begun".
I would have written " How cruel that our sun has set, when it had only just begun to rise"
5487 has obviously taken it from somewhere else, I was not implying that 5487's grammar was bad.
As Jno said, if we knew how you wished to apply it, we could perhaps be more help.