is this to cheesy?

[daisym6]

They stay there waiting for someone to bring them home, so they can restart there life. Dogs need homes too. People don’t realize that millions of dogs are being brought in, cared for and then they wait for a new owner to bring them home.Why don’t we save a innocent dog that needs our help?
I'm trying to convince my parents to adopt a homeless dog. (Yes i want a dog I'm experienced! I know they are alot of work please none of those coments!)
Is it too cheesy? Will it work?

[Craftypig]

I would recommend a dog to anyone that has the time, space, patience etc. From being a young child we have always had a dog. My dad used to get ex-police dogs but since leaving home I have had various different breeds.

[daisym6]

wolf gang, i am. and my only other question about MY dog is what sport i should do with her and yes i understand dogs DO take alot of responsiblity i forgot to add bella (the family dog) is a family dog. All i want to know is if this is to boring or will it work or is it to cheesy please no other comments i'm totally aware that dogs take responsiblity and alot of it my wrist is not broken! i just want to save a homeless dog thats all!

[cazzz1975]

I think its an unreasonable thing to ask, when you leave home and have your own place, get a dog then.

if you want to help out, then sponsor a dog or volunteer

[daisym6]

so parents wouldnt fall for it? Bella needs a playmate!

[cazzz1975]

thats where you come in, why not spend more time with your pet dog, Im sure she will appreciate it.

[boxtops]

Take her to socialising classes then! do your mum and dad work? Two dogs on their own in the house can cause chaos - ask my neighbours!

[chelle7272]

No they wouldn't. My son begs for a dog. I have always had dogs until the last one died a few years ago. Now I work full time it would not be fair but if possible to have one, I would want one more than he does. I know it's not good for anyone so it won't happen. So will your parents. Sorry but as has been said, you should wait until you leave home and know you are in a position to have a dog.

[daisym6]

thanks everybody i,ve reconsiderd trying to get another dog and i dont think i should get another and i should wait thanks everybody!
Just to let you know that i shoudnt get another pet because i have
1 betta
2 rats
2 gerbils
1 dog (family dog!)
about 15 snails maybe more breeding :O
and 3 fish!
;)
whats your favorite pet?

[Zacs-Master]

Try asking on twitter.

[EvianBaby]

Hey Daisy, do you know anyone called Molly?

[daisym6]

evianbaby i dont think so why

[daisym6]

my old (dead R.I.P) dog was named molly

[daisym6]

wait yea but shes older-ish maybe in her 30's 40's

[Chunkles]

Is This To Cheesy?

Whether this is too cheesy is open to debate. What is not open to debate is that this question is grammatically appalling.

1. In the title you should not capitalise every word and 'to' should be 'too'.

2. In the second line you should have written 'restart their lives' not 'restart there life'.

In the fourth line you should have written 'an innocent dog'.

In line seven 'alot' should be written as 'a lot'.

Hope this helps you to write better questions in the future.

They stay there waiting for someone to bring them home, so they can restart there life. Dogs need homes too. People don’t realize that millions of dogs are being brought in, cared for and then they wait for a new owner to bring them home.Why don’t we save a innocent dog that needs our help?
I'm trying to convince my parents to adopt a homeless dog. (Yes i want a dog I'm experienced! I know they are alot of work please none of those coments!)
Is it too cheesy? Will it work?

[ummmm]

First post...haha

[Teddy_boy]

Another red pen poster? You cant get enough corrections on here.Or so it seems.