Chilldoubt, I don't claim to be an expert on GSW and so, by default, neither is Mickey. But I did once come across the body of a man who'd just been shot in the face with a small calibre pistol. The only visible wound was a mark like a mole on his cheek below the eye. I'm guessing here, but if a bullet sliced across someones face would there not be a fair amount of blood? Is what I wrote so inaccurate?
I'm not an expert either, though I've seen a few.
You asked for an honest opinion.
I gave one.
If you'd have asked for constructive criticism, I'd have submitted something different.
sandy,you write completely authentically situation wise. all the language and phrasing and sense of the moment personally. You were there.! Personally,as someone else who lived through those times,I choose not to read or watch dramas about them any more. I just want to move on. Your writing is good though,very conversational:-)