Would You Continue Reading This?

[Tai_G]

Now that I've finished writing my YA dark fantasy novel, I'm wondering what other people think of the first chapter. I posted the first few paragraphs of the first chapter (NOT all of it) and I want to know if you wold continue reading. What do you think of the writing style?

http://www.wattpad.com/64568666-the-bane

[Obiter]

No.

[Baldric]

http://www.theanswerbank.co.uk/Arts-and-Literature/Question1364412.html

[boxtops]

duplicate post - it gets very confusing to all of us if you post more than once.